GCSE: Business Studies Essays, Coursework and Assignments

"#1#This essay is a brilliant example of a marketing plan and wouldn't look out of place if compared to A Level work. The author starts with a fantastic introduction which not only informs the reader of the views that will be put across in the essay but also gives a brief background on them. This shows great interest and knowledge on the chosen subject. #2#The level of analysising in this essay is extremly strong. The author clearly knows a lot about the subject and draws from many different streams of knowledge before forming their own views within the work. By adding their own opinions onto the models of marketing shows that the author has a background tha tis more than the average GCSE business student. The use of a diary is a effective and very imaginative way of giving a structure and a way to show a thought structure aswell as how the ideas evolved throughout the process. The evaluation clearly shows that the author has given time to analysis both sides of the subject as in business there is always at least two completely different ways of doing things. #3#The quality of the writing is excellent. The essay overall is structured well with a excellent standard of spelling, punctuation and grammar. The essay is very easy to read and by presenting it in the format it is, the author should gain maximum or close to maximum marks "

"#1# This essay engages superbly with the question. I liked how there was a progression from defining taxation onto analysis of how it affects interest rates, and then an evaluative paragraph discussing what other factors need to be considered. A clear structure such as this ensures that the essay is always focused on the task, whilst still showing all the skills necessary. #2# The analysis in this essay is strong, but as the diagrams are not included I can only assume they were right. There is a good awareness shown between indirect and direct taxes, and relevant examples are used well. What is particularly good about this essay is the explanation of the diagram. For example referring to "where IS shifts to IS1, the equilibrium level of income falls from Y1 to Y2" shows a full understanding of the diagram and the effects a shift can cause. There are some sophisticated concepts explored here, such as the marginal propensity to consume, which shows a strong understanding. I was pleased to see the phrase "ceteris paribus" used, as the task clearly states to mention any assumptions. By using this, it shows that you understand you cannot look at the changes without isolating one variable, whilst keeping the rest equal. The evaluative paragraph is very strong, picking out reasons why the change in interest rate isn't as clear cut. Being able to pick out determining factors, or external influences is a great way to get evaluative marks! I particularly liked the language used such as "the tax multiplier is dependent upon", "on the other hand" and "if the LM curve is very steep" as it shows a strong understanding of multiple factors and different situations. #3# This essay is structured well, having a clear introduction defining the key terms, and a strong conclusion posing a justified judgement. The points are well detailed, and it always stays on focus throughout. Technical terms are used well, and spelling, punctuation and grammar are strong. A strong essay!"

"#1# In summary, the report is quite good. The report states a number of factors which could impact upon the price of the products that Cadbury's sell. However one section, does link the factor to the cost of the product, and some points aren't justified. The student clearly understands a basic concept, of that if Cadbury's purchase too much stock/inventory the business will not be able to sell all of their products. This in turn, would result in the business making a loss, which the student understands. The report states that suitable employee's have to be employed by the business. However the student doesn't mention the cost impact on the business if the business employs unsuitable employees. The price of the product would have to increase, if there are unsuitable employees working at the business, this is due to that this is an additional unnecessary cost, which would have to be added to the cost of producing the product. However on the flip side, the section 'Security', the student does understand the cost of this, which would impact on the price of the product. #2# The student acknowledges that if the price increases, there is less demand. This is correct. However the student hasn't explained why the product may increase/decrease. The major factor is the cost of producing the product, alongside all their other costs of packaging, advertising, etc. The product price is a certain % above the cost price. If their cost price increases (for example, the raw cost of coca beans increases), the retail price may increase. #3# The student states the term 'stock', however within business this is often known as 'inventory'. This would show the examiner that the student understands basic business technical terms."

"#1# The author answers the question fantastically well. As he clearly sets out the pros of using correlation and extrapolation and highlights the cons as well, whilst using his/hers own knowledge of the industry to improve his points. Using own knowledge is very good, for instance the author highlighted the industry as oligopolistic; as it shows you have a good understanding of the topic and that you are ‘keen.’ The essay starts very well, due to the fact he defined the two techniques in the question, whenever you get an essay (can be any essay) always try to define the key terms and assess what the question is asking, which the author does. He concludes the essay, exceptionally, by bringing all the points he/she made in the essay together. In business studies essays it is important to have a balanced approach, so as to seem impartial and neutral, you shouldn’t be trying to force your argument, but to convey the data in a way that forms an argument, this is something the author does very well, as he/she doesn’t just say ‘extrapolation is the best because it can be accurate’ but says that they can be good, but they do have their draw backs (good examples of this in last three paragraphs.) #2# The level of analysis was good as well, as the author went in to some depth looking at the pros and cons of each method. Praise is due for not just saying what each method was, as there is a danger in these sorts of questions of describing, but actually analyzing. He improved his analysis substantially by using own knowledge, as it increased the level of depth they could go into. Another good thing to take away from this essay was the author’s use of an imaginary example to help explain some of his/her’s analysis, namely the example of using a bundle promotion. The use of a graph was very good as well as it gave the reader an exact idea of what they were discussing. #3# The spelling and grammar was very good. I do not think there were any errors. The layout was fantastic, as each point of analysis was in its own paragraph, doing this is thoroughly recommended, as it makes the essay easier to read. The author uses good connective words as well, which give a good balance to essay, which is vital in business studies/ economics essays, an example of the connective would be: ‘On one side….but on the other.’ This essay received all five stars, for having great analysis, good spelling and grammar, and having a balanced approach. "

"12-13 out of 14 here, i like the way the essay is layed out: point evaluation this makes it really easy to give marks, the quality of writing is good and the paragraphing makes the points clear. in terms of the content, there are no figures, maybe in the intro put some in, but again i would state the intro and conclusion sum the essay well. you miss a huge point on the welfare state issue of people who are unable to physically work, should we have more rigerous testing on who are incapable of working? you say the incentive for people working is removed, is that in comparison to a 100k job or minimum wage, this is unclear and whilst you may feel thats harsh an examiner may be harsh and ignore that point, as you talk about luxury goods (again where is the definition) overall a good clear essay scoring nearly full marks a couple of key points and definitions left out well done "