Should boxing be banned?

"Some good points here, but I feel that the essay is excessively affected by the author's admitted bias. A number of points are made with minimal justification, instead being simple assertions - this is evident from the fact that many of the paragraphs consist of single sentences. Considerable improvements could be gained from making the essay more balanced and from a deeper consideration of the reasons why the stated points are valid. I also feel that structurally the essay is weak in places - while it's good that the paragraphs do not become excessively long, this has gone to the opposite extreme and many are very short. This creates a rather haphazard structure as the various arguments don't really flow well into the overall structure. The final paragraph is a good example of a similar effect, with a large number of *very* short sentences. TSR User: Illusionary"