Fox Hunting - Cruelty or pest control?

"This essay is in a bit of a muddle, truth be told. The first thing that's evident is a poor standard of spelling and grammar throughout the piece, which is a disappointing start. Secondly, your structure is all over the place - it appears as if you're writing the essay as you think of the arguments, rather than having planned what arguments you'll use. Although I will give you credit for addressing both sides of the debate, which helps give the reader a balanced view of the debate. That said, an argument is only as strong as the material it's been constructed from, and I would like to see you cite your references and back up your claims (there are too many phrases like 'many people...' and 'it has been said...' - who? where?) Your conclusion is weak as well - it doesn't tie the essay together very well and you don't show any opinion on the matter (explicitly, anyway), which is a shame. TSR User: chidona"